100 words:
Kelsey gazed between branches at Jim’s gaunt features. She remembered the first time she ever laid eyes on him. She remembered everything. Their journey had more twists than the limbs holding her. She wondered why Grant had brought her here, now. Why this prison? Tentatively, she reached a hand through curving trunks. Jim turned away. That made sense. She had failed him utterly.
“Jim, I – ” she stopped. Just like that he disappeared, again! “I promise, I will find you,” she whispered hoarsely.
Her eyelids popped open. Jim lay there on the bed next to her, their fingers entwined.
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The above is my March 26, 2014 entry to Friday Fictioneers. Thanks to Rochelle for heading up this weekly challenge and to John Nixon for the photo prompt. Be sure to check out the other entries:
oh, so she was in the apartment or wherever, and imagining/dreaming she were in a forest with him. makes sense. forest symbolizes her confusion of what’s going on.
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[…] I’m continuing a series of glimpses from a larger story begun 4 weeks ago. You can check out my previous parts here: Homecoming Part 2 Part 3 […]
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I really want more. Very good. Lucy
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Maybe she is time-travelling or just plain afraid of losing him 🙂
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Hmm, both excellent assumptions! 🙂
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Inception lol 🙂 well done
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Oh, Camgal, I hadn’t even thought about that! Nice connection. I need to think on that for my future weeks…
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Welcome haha 🙂
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You created a really dream-like atmosphere with the same tenuous hold on reality. Ron
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Thanks so much, Ron! 🙂
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Dear Judah,
I haven’t read the first two, but this one stands alone just fine. A very well written piece that leaves the reader craving more.
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Thanks so much for your kind words, rgayer! 🙂
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Judah, I love the serial aspect and I keep wondering if Jim is suspicious. Really well written and thanks! Nan
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Glad you are enjoying it, Nan! Thanks for stopping by. 🙂
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Sometimes it’s so nice to wake up!!
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Indeed! 🙂
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So glad it was just a nightmare!Phew!Liked the tense tone underlying this piece Judah:-)
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Thanks, ATRM! 🙂
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🙂
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Dear Judah,
That’s the kind of dream to wake from. In all honesty, I don’t follow serials. Too many stories to read in one week to keep a thread in my head. Happily this one beautifully stands alone.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Well, thanks, Rochelle! I’m actually planning to use the bare bones of the past 3 weeks (and likely coming ones as well) to create a longer, cohesive tale.
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Very intriguing indeed. There seems to be nice story developing here among all these threads.
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I hope so, Subroto. We’ll see. Thanks for stopping by and commenting!
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Whew, what an intricate and thought-provoking dream! I had to go back to the previous parts to refresh my memory. This is such a suspenseful tale. I can’t wait to see what happens next!
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Thanks so much, Adelie! 🙂
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I like this serialization–very intriguing! I missed the past couple weeks of Friday Fictioneers, so I went back and played catch-up. Very well done!
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Thanks for stopping by and commenting, Jan. 🙂
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very interesting!
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Thanks, Bryan! 🙂
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What’s the deal with that guy anyway? Okay, keep it going ….
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You’re so funny, Perry. 🙂 You want in on the secret (where I think this might be going)?
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Dreams leave so much to be desired.
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And yet, I think for Kelsey, the dreams are more real than the reality… 🙂
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Hmm maybe a little desire is a good thing then?
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Absolutely! 🙂
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Neat. Looking forward to the next installment.
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Thanks, Sorchia. 🙂
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This is a lovely story, mixing dreams and hope with reality. Well done
Dee
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Thanks, Dee!
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Ah.. wonderful mixture of dreams and reality…
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Thanks, Bjorn!
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Dreams can be so real. You even slipped in a pun or two. 🙂
janet
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I did? 🙂 Thanks for stopping by, Janet!
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Glad you continued the story. I’m wondering where Jim is in all of this. I’ll find out, keep writing! I’m having fun with this.
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Thanks, WMQ, me too! 🙂 I feel a longer story brewing…
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Great accompaniment for the picture!
I wonder what Freud would make of her dream…
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hehehe, I wonder what Freud would make of my continuing story? 🙂
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