Last week’s entry had a few people asking me for more of the story brewing in my head. Thankfully, this week’s incredible photo prompt gave me just what I needed. Rochelle, I love your eye for photography!

101 Words
Kelsey woke with a start back in the dilapidated brownstone on Twelfth Street. What was Grant trying to tell her? The vivid dream had left her skin clammy; the taste of cranberries lingered on her tongue.
Dragging herself out of bed for something caffeinated, she padded across her 4th floor studio apartment wondering why this dream disturbed her more than the others – now 10, in as many days.
A knock diverted her from the coffee. “Who’s there?” she asked. No answer. Tying her robe’s sash tightly, she opened the door. Her empty mug exploded when it hit the concrete. “Jim!”
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if nobody answers, i’m not opening the door. 101 words? oh come now, you could easily scratch one out.
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I did try! Seriously! 🙂 Felt like I needed every one. (I can get a bit rebellious this way at times…)
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you don’t need “she asked” after “who’s there?” when we read “who’s there?” we know it’s her, and we know she was asking a question. there’s no way we’d read “who’s there?” and not know it was her and not know she asked a question. that makes “who’s there?” unnecessary. now you’ve knocked off the one word plus one more, and that gives you an extra, important word to add somewhere else.
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Indeed. 🙂
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see? toldja
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[…] from a larger story begun 4 weeks ago. You can check out my previous parts here: Homecoming Part 2 Part […]
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Well, we need another continuation. Wonderful opening paragraph – love the description of cranberries lingering. Can’t wait for more.
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Thanks, Sarah Ann! I have a plan for a continuation. It will come together before Sunday, I hope. 🙂
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Really, really good writing – so Jim is back – I’m sitting on pins and needles. By the way, you are a REAL writer. I am impressed with your talent. Keep it coming 🙂 Nan
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Thanks, Nan. 🙂 I appreciate the encouragement!
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Looks like this could develop into an interesting story!
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If only I were a ‘real’ writer! lol
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Good continuation for the last story. Good description. Well done. Looks like a lot of us want to know more.
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Thanks, Patricia. I hope more of it comes to me so I can satisfy everyone’s curiosity (including my own)! 🙂
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surprise at the door…and with the taste of cranberries lingering. my imagination is running wild wondering! great story, Judah. 🙂
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Why, thank you, Sun! 🙂
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Great story, parts 1 & 2. Is he alive or simply a spirit?
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We might find out in the coming weeks, Patrick. 🙂 Thanks for reading.
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that was spooky. I like it. Very good. Lucy
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Thanks, Lucy!
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Definitely one where you wonder what’s going to happen next! Nice.
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Thanks, Erin!
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SO full of rich and satisfying details and you only used one extra word! Amazing. I’d like to know what that cranberry taste was all about (probably for “water-cooler talk” effect). Super good, Judah! I’d like to read more.
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Thanks, wmq! I’m glad you asked about the cranberry taste (you’re the first!) – it was meant to indicate that the dream had been so real, maybe actually real… 😉
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Mysterious!
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Thanks, Ptrujvijoen. 🙂
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Nicely done. I had to go back and read part 1 🙂
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Awesome! Thanks, Subroto. 🙂
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i wonder if it was a ghost she saw.
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Hmmm, the world may never know! 😉
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I’ve had nightmares about this happening too! 😉
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Wait! You’re seeing Jim in your dreams? And Adam is having him killed?!! Jim sure does get around!
hehehe 😉
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Way to leave us hanging 😉
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😀
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I’m liking it, I’m liking it. Keep the mystery going.
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Thanks, Perry. Problem is it’s all mystery and no solved! 😉
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Judah, nice description and sense of mystery.
janet
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Thanks, Janet!
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This is a wonderful follow-up. The first part pulls the reader in, with a realistic scene and compelling dreams (nightmares and dreams do have a way of setting a mood!)… when she opens the door and Jim is alive, wow! Nice job, in so few words!
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Thanks, Dawn!
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Dear JF,
A lot of tension and mystery.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle. Really love the photo!!
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Well told. Would love to read more 🙂
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Thanks, Siobhan! We’ll see what develops.
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Very much a cliff hanger.
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Sandra, sometimes I think that’s all I’ve got … cliffs! lol Having trouble going anywhere else with it.
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Oh…I am hooked! Jim is quite alive after all and where is Grant! 🙂
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Thanks, Sarah. Indeed!
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Reblogged this on ugiridharaprasad.
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I do love a good mystery! Wondering about her visitor….nicely done.
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Thanks for stopping by, Shandra. Maybe one week we’ll find out who the heck Jim is! lol
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Great entry! Are you going to keep developing the story?
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I actually plan to, Guapo! I’ve never tried my hand at a short fiction story, but this one has grabbed my attention. I have a feeling when I get it to that point these little snippets won’t look quite the same. 😉
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That’s great! I love the feeling when a story starts yelling to be let out.
(I love it more when I’m capable of properly expressing it, but that’s a totally different conversation.)
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I hear ya! 🙂
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P.S. Thanks for the encouragement to keep going!
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You’re welcome!
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